Forum: empire-en
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Topic: [75253] The Mountain King
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MAXRuler0 [None]
:: July 9, 2012, 9:31 a.m.
Okay, so it is the holidays for me and I have heaps of spare time so I thought I would write a short story.
Prologue
Carrius walked strenuously up the cold, misty mountain, The mountain patrol was a tough thing to do. He was the chosen commander of this elite group. suddenly, A massive rock monster smashed through the side of the mountain creating a paralyzing shockwave, causing large chunks of debris to smash through the area of the path. Carrius somehow managed to duck as a massive rock whizzed over his head. The rock smashed straight into the boulder behind them, making a tremendous shockwave and throwing the men in the area on to the ground. The shock had now died and the patrol was very alert. They charged at the rock monster with a deafening cry. This was so insignificant for the monster, it swiped its arm with tremendous force, nearly throwing the whole army off the cliff. Carrius manage to duck, but could still feel the colossal disturbance in the air. He was the only one that survived. He then felt a giant thing wrapping itself around his body, it was the monster carrying him away>
Chapter one
King Avalon of Trong (That refers to something) was very tired, he never got a days rest from his hard, thoughtful work. He wasn't at all like other sovereigns, who relied on their advisors to do all the work. He was a non-heretical King.
One day while The king of trong was sitting on his throne a messenger arrived, apparently bringing bad tidings, "Go on", said the king. "I have recieved news that the mountain king is declaring war on us and should be here in a couple of days", said in messanger with an alerted tone. Avalon quickly bolted up, mentally swiping away his mesmeric sleepiness. "He can't give us a break, can he?", Avalon said in a half joking, half serious tone. "Well spies have said this attack is a lot more potent", siad the messanger. "Well must we get ready for the siege" said the king, wielding his golden hammer. "Yes, but one last thing", said the messenger. "Yes". "They have taken hostages".
The next part is coming soon, please be patient enough to wait.
Thanks!
Prologue
Carrius walked strenuously up the cold, misty mountain, The mountain patrol was a tough thing to do. He was the chosen commander of this elite group. suddenly, A massive rock monster smashed through the side of the mountain creating a paralyzing shockwave, causing large chunks of debris to smash through the area of the path. Carrius somehow managed to duck as a massive rock whizzed over his head. The rock smashed straight into the boulder behind them, making a tremendous shockwave and throwing the men in the area on to the ground. The shock had now died and the patrol was very alert. They charged at the rock monster with a deafening cry. This was so insignificant for the monster, it swiped its arm with tremendous force, nearly throwing the whole army off the cliff. Carrius manage to duck, but could still feel the colossal disturbance in the air. He was the only one that survived. He then felt a giant thing wrapping itself around his body, it was the monster carrying him away>
Chapter one
King Avalon of Trong (That refers to something) was very tired, he never got a days rest from his hard, thoughtful work. He wasn't at all like other sovereigns, who relied on their advisors to do all the work. He was a non-heretical King.
One day while The king of trong was sitting on his throne a messenger arrived, apparently bringing bad tidings, "Go on", said the king. "I have recieved news that the mountain king is declaring war on us and should be here in a couple of days", said in messanger with an alerted tone. Avalon quickly bolted up, mentally swiping away his mesmeric sleepiness. "He can't give us a break, can he?", Avalon said in a half joking, half serious tone. "Well spies have said this attack is a lot more potent", siad the messanger. "Well must we get ready for the siege" said the king, wielding his golden hammer. "Yes, but one last thing", said the messenger. "Yes". "They have taken hostages".
The next part is coming soon, please be patient enough to wait.
Thanks!
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MAXRuler0 [None]
:: July 9, 2012, 9:34 a.m.
Sorry it was is late and I don't have time to do a longer part one.
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MAXRuler0 [None]
:: July 10, 2012, 5:23 a.m.
Sorry, I will not write more until people reply
because if no one is reading, what is the point of writing it?
because if no one is reading, what is the point of writing it?
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Luke Fierysword [None]
:: July 16, 2012, 8:18 p.m.
I like the way you gave the prologue and then shifted back to the king
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King Avalon 2 [None]
:: July 16, 2012, 8:45 p.m.
Do I know you because most of my username is in ur story....
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matmo32 [None]
:: July 16, 2012, 11:28 p.m.
lol it is was that on purpose
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: July 21, 2012, 7:27 a.m.
No, Avalon, King Avalon is probably in reference to something else.
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Unknown
:: July 21, 2012, 1:29 p.m.
MAXRuler0 waiting for the rest of the story 
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MAXRuler0 [None]
:: Aug. 3, 2012, 6:19 a.m.
okay I will lol
Coming soon
Coming soon
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MAXRuler0 [None]
:: Aug. 4, 2012, 8:54 p.m.
The King stared blank facedly at the elegant, organised castle.
Long supervision hours had made him so tired, he couldn't see properly.
He then said, vainly, "when will this end"
beyond his elegant palace he watched from his verander the organised dwellings and the defense workshops which were very urgently and without stop making tools.
What could defend Trong?
As usual his spy came with the daily report, he wasn't listening, he was too tired for that.
Yet one thing caught his attention.
"There has been a massacre near the park where a goblin poisoned soldier rations".
"Double the guards and don't let anyone into the castle that is something like that monster".
"Yes sir", said the spy
Chapter three
The mountain king sat in on his throne, he was a foul undead person, a very large one and wielded a evil demeanor and a terrifying sword.
He couldn't believe it
The King was actually stupid enough to let a goblin in?
He would conquer Trong and start his virtual empire
He couldn't stop laughing as his undead and mountain trolls marched out of the rocky interface.
"Trong is mine!", He cried.
Long supervision hours had made him so tired, he couldn't see properly.
He then said, vainly, "when will this end"
beyond his elegant palace he watched from his verander the organised dwellings and the defense workshops which were very urgently and without stop making tools.
What could defend Trong?
As usual his spy came with the daily report, he wasn't listening, he was too tired for that.
Yet one thing caught his attention.
"There has been a massacre near the park where a goblin poisoned soldier rations".
"Double the guards and don't let anyone into the castle that is something like that monster".
"Yes sir", said the spy
Chapter three
The mountain king sat in on his throne, he was a foul undead person, a very large one and wielded a evil demeanor and a terrifying sword.
He couldn't believe it
The King was actually stupid enough to let a goblin in?
He would conquer Trong and start his virtual empire
He couldn't stop laughing as his undead and mountain trolls marched out of the rocky interface.
"Trong is mine!", He cried.
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MAXRuler0 [None]
:: Aug. 4, 2012, 8:54 p.m.
Part three is coming after more commentary is made
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 4, 2012, 9:35 p.m.
Great Story! But can you try to clear things up, like why letting a goblin in is bad?
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MAXRuler0 [None]
:: Aug. 4, 2012, 9:43 p.m.
okay, I will try
They are evil:))))))
They are evil:))))))
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 4, 2012, 9:52 p.m.
OoooooooOoooooooh . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
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MAXRuler0 [None]
:: Aug. 4, 2012, 10:46 p.m.
lol
true, true, true
true, true, true
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Luke Fierysword [None]
:: Aug. 4, 2012, 10:51 p.m.
LOL what about elves?
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MAXRuler0 [None]
:: Aug. 4, 2012, 11:41 p.m.
well, maybe they will come:)