Forum: empire-en
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Topic: [75446] Dracenza:Rise of the Dragon
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 3, 2012, 10:38 p.m.
As far as I know.
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 11, 2012, 2:53 a.m.
You know why I'm deleting? Maybe I'll tell you . . .
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SirFiddlesticks (AU1) [None]
:: Aug. 11, 2012, 6:47 a.m.
Nice one, Cyclone! 
IMO, add more description and flow to your story, I think the action and plot goes waaayyyy too fast. xP Maybe slow some parts down, for contrast, and insert some writing techniques e.g. imagery, metaphors/similies?
Also, how about putting them all into one post, at some point or another? It'd be much more convenient.
Heh, I got high expectations, feel free to take or leave my advice/critisizm xD. Still, I really like it!
IMO, add more description and flow to your story, I think the action and plot goes waaayyyy too fast. xP Maybe slow some parts down, for contrast, and insert some writing techniques e.g. imagery, metaphors/similies?
Also, how about putting them all into one post, at some point or another? It'd be much more convenient.
Heh, I got high expectations, feel free to take or leave my advice/critisizm xD. Still, I really like it!
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 11, 2012, 7:42 a.m.
I do tend to rush a bit. Once, I went from one side of the world to another without any form of transportation, in one of my failed stories on my computer.
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Unknown
:: Aug. 12, 2012, 1:08 a.m.
Great! Absoloetuly great
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 12, 2012, 4:03 a.m.
Thankyou. I REALLY hate these stupid word limits.
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SirFiddlesticks (AU1) [None]
:: Aug. 13, 2012, 5:51 a.m.
When's Part 6 coming out?
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king matt III [None]
:: Aug. 13, 2012, 6:58 a.m.
ProStrategos wrote: »Nice one, Cyclone!
IMO, add more description and flow to your story, I think the action and plot goes waaayyyy too fast. xP Maybe slow some parts down, for contrast, and insert some writing techniques e.g. imagery, metaphors/similies?
Also, how about putting them all into one post, at some point or another? It'd be much more convenient.
Heh, I got high expectations, feel free to take or leave my advice/critisizm xD. Still, I really like it!
i could not agree more, and i will tell you in my few stories have wrote if want they to be good, i have to edit many times and i force myself to add description of places, smells and sounds. when i am writing i have to get myself to imagine i am there and i have to pick out details i am imagining and i suggest not all details but the ones that add to the feel you want the part to have. which is harder than it sounds. hope this helped you some, you have already been doing great!
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 13, 2012, 10:35 a.m.
More deleting!
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 13, 2012, 10:36 a.m.
And does anyone have any ideas to shorten Dracoelectricitatem's name?
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king matt III [None]
:: Aug. 13, 2012, 12:44 p.m.
how about dralectra
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SirFiddlesticks (AU1) [None]
:: Aug. 13, 2012, 1:33 p.m.
I would go for Dracoelectra...
Love your use of description, vocab, and continuous thought in Part 6/7, keep up the good work, Cyclone! ;D
Only 1 question, how does the protagnist survive for 2 months on air (although he's trapped in a cave and could even be suffocating)?
Love your use of description, vocab, and continuous thought in Part 6/7, keep up the good work, Cyclone! ;D
Only 1 question, how does the protagnist survive for 2 months on air (although he's trapped in a cave and could even be suffocating)?
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ThornPrickley [None]
:: Aug. 13, 2012, 5:29 p.m.
obviously, there's magic! After all, this is a sci fi fantasy!
I have only ready one other series that was both sci fi and fantasy, and it was called the incarnations, by Peirs Anthony
I have only ready one other series that was both sci fi and fantasy, and it was called the incarnations, by Peirs Anthony
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doglider [None]
:: Aug. 13, 2012, 7:06 p.m.
Dracoelectra sounds cool.
Really nice story.
Keep going.
Really nice story.
Keep going.
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king matt III [None]
:: Aug. 13, 2012, 7:07 p.m.
Dracoelectra sounds cool.
Really nice story.
Keep going.
ProStrategos wrote: »I would go for Dracoelectra...
Love your use of description, vocab, and continuous thought in Part 6/7, keep up the good work, Cyclone! ;D
Only 1 question, how does the protagnist survive for 2 months on air (although he's trapped in a cave and could even be suffocating)?
cool, ididn't think that bname would work but i was wrong
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SirFiddlesticks (AU1) [None]
:: Aug. 14, 2012, 6:43 a.m.
ThornPrickley wrote: »obviously, there's magic! After all, this is a sci fi fantasy!
I have only ready one other series that was both sci fi and fantasy, and it was called the incarnations, by Peirs Anthony
Well, he's also losing blood at a steady rate - daily. IMO just a little too implausible (its like he's almost invicible, and where would the fun be in that lol xD)
Dracoelectra sounds cool.
Really nice story.
Keep going.
king matt III wrote: »cool, ididn't think that bname would work but i was wrong
^ thx for the support doglider and king matt! But in the end, its up to you, Cyclone, but I hope you re-name your dragon 'Dracoelectra' ;D
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 14, 2012, 9:53 a.m.
Sorry I'm deleting.
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SirFiddlesticks (AU1) [None]
:: Aug. 14, 2012, 1:24 p.m.
Awesome! I really like the description and (again) the thought tracking.
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 15, 2012, 6:13 a.m.
Part 9 will be coming later on tonight, or tomorrow. I have a curriculum day tomorrow, so I will write tomorrow.
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Cyclone14 (INT1) [INT1]
:: Aug. 16, 2012, 10:37 a.m.
Part 9 coming tomorrow, hopefully. Sorry for the delay.