Forum: empire-en
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Topic: [75750] Story-time!
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SirFiddlesticks (AU1) [None]
:: Aug. 14, 2012, 6:51 a.m.
Pretty impressive... I like the way it ties in to GGE, as well as the description! Any hints about the main plot? ;D
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king matt III [None]
:: Aug. 14, 2012, 12:40 p.m.
well the preparing for an attack and the mention of being a slave is not only to give a feel for kenny's viewpoint but plays a big role in the story. also the next few sections are VERY detailed.
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SirFiddlesticks (AU1) [None]
:: Aug. 14, 2012, 1:19 p.m.
Ok, cool, looking forward to the next parts - make it quick (but not if it detracts from the quality lol xD)!
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king matt III [None]
:: Aug. 14, 2012, 4:02 p.m.
ProStrategos wrote: »Ok, cool, looking forward to the next parts - make it quick (but not if it detracts from the quality lol xD)!
glad you like it so much. i am post a new part every 2 days. the reason is i have another story called "real mythology" i am doing, and shcool is a few weeks away so my time will get short. i have up to chapter 3 done but i don't want to get in a rush at any point, especially during school. so check out the other story and post if you like it or want more.
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Kings Servant [None]
:: Aug. 15, 2012, 12:45 a.m.
hey king matt III, i have read your other story real mythology, i like a lot so far! just can't wait to see the next parts for both stories!
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king matt III [None]
:: Aug. 15, 2012, 2:05 a.m.
story deleted by me
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SirFiddlesticks (AU1) [None]
:: Aug. 15, 2012, 4:57 a.m.
Eh...did you rush it? No offense, but I kinda think the quality dropped in Section 6... 
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king matt III [None]
:: Aug. 15, 2012, 10:17 p.m.
section 6 was part of 6 but i had to split it up because of time... section 7 is better.
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king matt III [None]
:: Aug. 19, 2012, 9:20 a.m.
Sorry but i will only be able to post new parts once this week, sorry everyone. Also if anyone has any ideas they would like to see in one of my stories or even future stories, pm it to me. I will be happy to acknowledge you as the idea creator.
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Kings Servant [None]
:: Aug. 23, 2012, 5:18 p.m.
well i gave you that idea a bit ago, but i don't care if you say i made it. anyway no problem if you can't post or a bit!
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king matt III [None]
:: Sept. 18, 2012, 7:14 p.m.
sorry but for now this story is temporally discontinued by me
note to mods and cm's: leave the thread open because i plan on returning to the story
note to mods and cm's: leave the thread open because i plan on returning to the story
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king matt III [None]
:: Sept. 22, 2012, 7:37 p.m.
story deleted by me
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swag like ohio3 [None]
:: Sept. 22, 2012, 11:14 p.m.
cool story
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king matt III [None]
:: Sept. 24, 2012, 6:08 p.m.
story deleted by me
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king matt III [None]
:: April 3, 2014, 12:08 a.m.
I never got too far with this story but i figured i would re post it:
"Ouch", kenny mummbled softly as he slowly opened his eyes to the blinding early morning sun. It felt as if a fire was inside his head. He covered his eyes until they adjusted and as the fire subsided he looked around and everything still seemed very bright. I never would have had this problem with the travelers, we were always moving before sunrise, he thought to himself. As everything returned to its normal color again, kenny remembered exactly where he was, the fourth cot of the newest dwelling in the castle.
The building had an exposed wooden structure and a slanted roof with the only entrance and exit being a large open space that you could see the first cot from. This doorway had a small roof piece hanging over it and was held up by 2 supports in the corners. A small porch area was also outside and covered by the roof. The ground near the dwelling was always muddy because of the rain draining off the slanted roof and collection on the ground in puddles. As he looked around the slowly becoming familiar dwelling he counted how long he had been here already " 3..4..5". It was his fifth day of voluntary slavery. His mind knew it was only a few days but his body was convinced it was a lifetime of work he had already completed. Then his mind demanded it was only a few days, a few days, a few days of an entire lifetime of permanent slavery. He heard of being freed before, but from the looks of it the king or prince or whoever ran this castle of slavery had no intention to free even the slaves who were minutues away from dying, let alone a young boy and his mother who just moved in 5 days ago.
He tried to convince mom, to get her to listen but she kept saying they need a place to live. "i don't understand it, we were just fine on our own, why did we NEED a place to live", kenny said to himself as he slowly sat-up in his cot. "Why do i keep talking to myself?" and answering his own question in his mind kenny decided it was living in the new castle and dwelling that caused it, or maybe he was going crazy! "SHIFT 3, LET'S GO RIGHT NOW", the overseers screamed. Kenny jumped up, pushed any worries of insanity aside, and rushed into his work clothes and ran out as fast as he could. Kenny took his quickly-grabbed breath and let it out in a sigh of relief, heew, i'm only behind a few people today, i couldn't wait behind 30 or more people again like yesterday, just to use the outhouse! As kenny nevously waited, he looked around and saw many people waking up and heading in the directin of the castle gate to use the forest insead of waiting in line as usual, but they returned much too early.
Then he finally remembered that the gate was ordered to be secured, closed, and re-enfoced since an attack was expected. Along the walls, stones and large pots steaming with something hot were being loaded and prepared, probably for defense for the battl. "Hurry up already" kenny membled under his breath. Kenny then began to look up at the sky above the masssive stone walls around him and began to think about being a free person, then quickly realized that it was an impossible dream and thought to himself: here begins the sixth day of the next-. The door to the outhouse opened. Cutting him off the door squeaked from its old hinges, grinding to death. After kenny used the outhouse, instead of the forest, he reported to his job in the keep. On the way he admired the many wells and even the hero statue. As he glanced at the sundial he ran off relizing had taken too long already and wanted to avoid any more trouble. He stopped at the keep's gat and waited as it was opened for him. As the keep's gate stopped and was fully opened he walked through the guarded wood and stone doorway and he felt the swift, heavy staring eyes of the watchful military who took the guards stations in light of the attack threat. They were cold and ruthless, the military atop the keep's gate were unmoving as the sundial and stautes posted across the castle. They watched every move, breath, and step you made in thier vision, they were trained to attack and today they were on high alert!
As they methodically shifted constantly waiting ready to strike at any change in pace i might make with tiewith thier permanent friend, thier shiny,cold,and deadly weapons at thier side awaiting order from the solider's hands to swiftly slice the air in retailiation. As kennycontinued to walk he shieved as the cold shock of fear went down his spine as the loud crack of massive gate he just passed was slammed shut and then a metallic BANG echoed through the hallway. Then as the hallway reached 10, it opened to its travelers the expanses and luxurious grass of the warm and peaceful courtyard. The courtyard had a stone – paved walkway through the middle winding league-leading its guests into the entrance of the keep. I always liked the courtyard, it was always carefully taking care of like a precious ruby. It's rumored that the courtyard is the princesses most favorite place in the castle, which is reasonable since she loves nature and decorations. The courtyard has a fairly basic design, the central part was a stone paved walkway. The walkway was lined with several flowers, starting with a red set that faded as it went on, then it gave way to an ordered set, moving into a yellow set, that a green set sailing into a blue set, to a indigo set and ending with a violet. The walkway gave the effect of walking on a winding rainbow as the mirror – like stone reflected the flower's rainbow colors through their unending polish. The rainbow gave everyone a sense of calm and tranquility as it pulls you through the courtyard like you have always been loved and protected. Kenny almost ran into the large double doors that make up the entrances keep. As I then opened those towering double doors by their huge swinging ring handles the doors gave way and the rich warm feeling of the ring but suddenly was ripped out of my soul as the dark and cold forces of the entrance burst its way past me to escape the depressingly bleak scene painted by the entrance hallway. The feeling of the room never found a way out of the vortex of the oppression that declared the entrance is home, as if it was forbidden to save itself from despair. I shut the doors ceiling myself inside, and only saw a far off light. So I walked calmly through the darkness toward the light emanating from the second room. As I took each step I could hear it slap flat against the hard and cold rock floor and banging against the wall once and died by the power of the darkness that consumes the hallway. Bang, bang, bang, bang, bang. The next room opened up on the left and as you entered it, it was a soft yellow world of its own. The area had two huge glass windows, that commanded your attention as soon is the room opened up on your left place. The room had almost everything in yellow the two windows had two curtains each that folded over itself and had waves along its entire. They stretch from near the immense ceiling at the top of the window down to the height of a man's a leg, resting, almost floating above the hard floor of rock. The two rooms windows faced out to look at the dwellings, the castle wall, and beyond to the farms. The windows were also leading in the East morning sun tan to the yellow, bright, and cheerful feeling of the room place was set up for company as you could tell, since the yellow material – covered couch, and many chairs, of the same material based the same elegant table of some type of the glass, like the most still waters of the most silent like, or as the peaceful level layer of the winters overnight snow. The chairs arrangement was in an open oval – like shape. The chair facing the room's entrance was wooden and had material of an medium red, but it was the most separated of the furniture, not only providing a way to go to the small table arranged for tea, directly behind the chair but also to give a powerful appearance to the ones sitting upon a sunlight which stream forth from the windows behind it. "Kenny, what are you doing?!", Called the maiden of the Queen, "let's go, you can stare later, you have work to do!". "Sorry Sid Kenny, I was just admiring the roo- roo- room". “I know it is an interesting room but you have work to do, and you are to address me is Ms. Catherine or as man, if that understood?””ye- ye- yes ma'am”sttuttered Kenny”. “Good lad”, she echoed through the brilliantly lit room.”Not follow me ”she walked straight and made a turn almost completely to the left. Bolted out of the room carrying a pile of dishes, and continued down and unlit stone hallway to my right and we walked the length of the keep and follow the path curving left. She went through was the only door on the left at the end of the hallway. As I followed her she fire orders some of the many servants around the keep, that were everywhere like the honey bee Cove I got into as a three-year-old on one of our trips with the travelers. The servants were also busy and were swarming everywhere. Backspace, I don't know how Ms. Catherine managed it all, and there were individuals and groups of individuals all separate teams, backspace. She then turned into a large door and I followed noticing the door swing back and forth. Ms. Catherine had taken me in the kitchen, she dropped off some dishes that she spun around and quickly with almost no breath: “Kenny, this is my report”, handing me a folded up piece of thick paper, “take this down the hallway we came down, and in between the curve and entrance room about middle of the main hallway”, stopping to catch her breat she paused. Continuing she said “there's a door on your left, go in it and follow it up the red carpet hallway, and take it to the Prince at once!”So I did is Ms. Catherine asked and followed upward the spinning steps to a red carpeted hallway, following it along the Lorch window on the left of the hallway, until I reached the door and window of blue glass looking into a huge glass dome room. I went in it and saw that it had a long table with seats at the head and foot of it and many seats along the sides. The unmistakable Prince was at the head of the table and a chair he was listening to some other seated there at the table. One demanded that action be taken now before someone attacked the prince merely raise his hand in the room fell silent. “Cmdr. Greg the problem is only in your mind now, we will discuss this problem you were making up later.
"Ouch", kenny mummbled softly as he slowly opened his eyes to the blinding early morning sun. It felt as if a fire was inside his head. He covered his eyes until they adjusted and as the fire subsided he looked around and everything still seemed very bright. I never would have had this problem with the travelers, we were always moving before sunrise, he thought to himself. As everything returned to its normal color again, kenny remembered exactly where he was, the fourth cot of the newest dwelling in the castle.
The building had an exposed wooden structure and a slanted roof with the only entrance and exit being a large open space that you could see the first cot from. This doorway had a small roof piece hanging over it and was held up by 2 supports in the corners. A small porch area was also outside and covered by the roof. The ground near the dwelling was always muddy because of the rain draining off the slanted roof and collection on the ground in puddles. As he looked around the slowly becoming familiar dwelling he counted how long he had been here already " 3..4..5". It was his fifth day of voluntary slavery. His mind knew it was only a few days but his body was convinced it was a lifetime of work he had already completed. Then his mind demanded it was only a few days, a few days, a few days of an entire lifetime of permanent slavery. He heard of being freed before, but from the looks of it the king or prince or whoever ran this castle of slavery had no intention to free even the slaves who were minutues away from dying, let alone a young boy and his mother who just moved in 5 days ago.
He tried to convince mom, to get her to listen but she kept saying they need a place to live. "i don't understand it, we were just fine on our own, why did we NEED a place to live", kenny said to himself as he slowly sat-up in his cot. "Why do i keep talking to myself?" and answering his own question in his mind kenny decided it was living in the new castle and dwelling that caused it, or maybe he was going crazy! "SHIFT 3, LET'S GO RIGHT NOW", the overseers screamed. Kenny jumped up, pushed any worries of insanity aside, and rushed into his work clothes and ran out as fast as he could. Kenny took his quickly-grabbed breath and let it out in a sigh of relief, heew, i'm only behind a few people today, i couldn't wait behind 30 or more people again like yesterday, just to use the outhouse! As kenny nevously waited, he looked around and saw many people waking up and heading in the directin of the castle gate to use the forest insead of waiting in line as usual, but they returned much too early.
Then he finally remembered that the gate was ordered to be secured, closed, and re-enfoced since an attack was expected. Along the walls, stones and large pots steaming with something hot were being loaded and prepared, probably for defense for the battl. "Hurry up already" kenny membled under his breath. Kenny then began to look up at the sky above the masssive stone walls around him and began to think about being a free person, then quickly realized that it was an impossible dream and thought to himself: here begins the sixth day of the next-. The door to the outhouse opened. Cutting him off the door squeaked from its old hinges, grinding to death. After kenny used the outhouse, instead of the forest, he reported to his job in the keep. On the way he admired the many wells and even the hero statue. As he glanced at the sundial he ran off relizing had taken too long already and wanted to avoid any more trouble. He stopped at the keep's gat and waited as it was opened for him. As the keep's gate stopped and was fully opened he walked through the guarded wood and stone doorway and he felt the swift, heavy staring eyes of the watchful military who took the guards stations in light of the attack threat. They were cold and ruthless, the military atop the keep's gate were unmoving as the sundial and stautes posted across the castle. They watched every move, breath, and step you made in thier vision, they were trained to attack and today they were on high alert!
As they methodically shifted constantly waiting ready to strike at any change in pace i might make with tiewith thier permanent friend, thier shiny,cold,and deadly weapons at thier side awaiting order from the solider's hands to swiftly slice the air in retailiation. As kennycontinued to walk he shieved as the cold shock of fear went down his spine as the loud crack of massive gate he just passed was slammed shut and then a metallic BANG echoed through the hallway. Then as the hallway reached 10, it opened to its travelers the expanses and luxurious grass of the warm and peaceful courtyard. The courtyard had a stone – paved walkway through the middle winding league-leading its guests into the entrance of the keep. I always liked the courtyard, it was always carefully taking care of like a precious ruby. It's rumored that the courtyard is the princesses most favorite place in the castle, which is reasonable since she loves nature and decorations. The courtyard has a fairly basic design, the central part was a stone paved walkway. The walkway was lined with several flowers, starting with a red set that faded as it went on, then it gave way to an ordered set, moving into a yellow set, that a green set sailing into a blue set, to a indigo set and ending with a violet. The walkway gave the effect of walking on a winding rainbow as the mirror – like stone reflected the flower's rainbow colors through their unending polish. The rainbow gave everyone a sense of calm and tranquility as it pulls you through the courtyard like you have always been loved and protected. Kenny almost ran into the large double doors that make up the entrances keep. As I then opened those towering double doors by their huge swinging ring handles the doors gave way and the rich warm feeling of the ring but suddenly was ripped out of my soul as the dark and cold forces of the entrance burst its way past me to escape the depressingly bleak scene painted by the entrance hallway. The feeling of the room never found a way out of the vortex of the oppression that declared the entrance is home, as if it was forbidden to save itself from despair. I shut the doors ceiling myself inside, and only saw a far off light. So I walked calmly through the darkness toward the light emanating from the second room. As I took each step I could hear it slap flat against the hard and cold rock floor and banging against the wall once and died by the power of the darkness that consumes the hallway. Bang, bang, bang, bang, bang. The next room opened up on the left and as you entered it, it was a soft yellow world of its own. The area had two huge glass windows, that commanded your attention as soon is the room opened up on your left place. The room had almost everything in yellow the two windows had two curtains each that folded over itself and had waves along its entire. They stretch from near the immense ceiling at the top of the window down to the height of a man's a leg, resting, almost floating above the hard floor of rock. The two rooms windows faced out to look at the dwellings, the castle wall, and beyond to the farms. The windows were also leading in the East morning sun tan to the yellow, bright, and cheerful feeling of the room place was set up for company as you could tell, since the yellow material – covered couch, and many chairs, of the same material based the same elegant table of some type of the glass, like the most still waters of the most silent like, or as the peaceful level layer of the winters overnight snow. The chairs arrangement was in an open oval – like shape. The chair facing the room's entrance was wooden and had material of an medium red, but it was the most separated of the furniture, not only providing a way to go to the small table arranged for tea, directly behind the chair but also to give a powerful appearance to the ones sitting upon a sunlight which stream forth from the windows behind it. "Kenny, what are you doing?!", Called the maiden of the Queen, "let's go, you can stare later, you have work to do!". "Sorry Sid Kenny, I was just admiring the roo- roo- room". “I know it is an interesting room but you have work to do, and you are to address me is Ms. Catherine or as man, if that understood?””ye- ye- yes ma'am”sttuttered Kenny”. “Good lad”, she echoed through the brilliantly lit room.”Not follow me ”she walked straight and made a turn almost completely to the left. Bolted out of the room carrying a pile of dishes, and continued down and unlit stone hallway to my right and we walked the length of the keep and follow the path curving left. She went through was the only door on the left at the end of the hallway. As I followed her she fire orders some of the many servants around the keep, that were everywhere like the honey bee Cove I got into as a three-year-old on one of our trips with the travelers. The servants were also busy and were swarming everywhere. Backspace, I don't know how Ms. Catherine managed it all, and there were individuals and groups of individuals all separate teams, backspace. She then turned into a large door and I followed noticing the door swing back and forth. Ms. Catherine had taken me in the kitchen, she dropped off some dishes that she spun around and quickly with almost no breath: “Kenny, this is my report”, handing me a folded up piece of thick paper, “take this down the hallway we came down, and in between the curve and entrance room about middle of the main hallway”, stopping to catch her breat she paused. Continuing she said “there's a door on your left, go in it and follow it up the red carpet hallway, and take it to the Prince at once!”So I did is Ms. Catherine asked and followed upward the spinning steps to a red carpeted hallway, following it along the Lorch window on the left of the hallway, until I reached the door and window of blue glass looking into a huge glass dome room. I went in it and saw that it had a long table with seats at the head and foot of it and many seats along the sides. The unmistakable Prince was at the head of the table and a chair he was listening to some other seated there at the table. One demanded that action be taken now before someone attacked the prince merely raise his hand in the room fell silent. “Cmdr. Greg the problem is only in your mind now, we will discuss this problem you were making up later.