Forum: empire-en

Board: [942] US Migration Content - Community

Topic: [321511] My Story: Demon of Zorag

[-321511] PizzaWarrior5 (US1) (Banned) [None] :: Oct. 16, 2016, 10:07 p.m.

Hey guys,

I created a story with some of my friends, Here is a link to it, I hope you all enjoy and if You have tips, go and put a comment on them

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1grt4R6m36oSiL6RnONoSJ3XzyUTK-rc99H6x-4R_ros/edit?usp=sharing


-Pizza

[4594940] Sameehah (GB1) [GB1] :: Oct. 16, 2016, 10:16 p.m.

This your first story?

[4594968] Amnesiac Lapp (US1) [None] :: Oct. 16, 2016, 11:11 p.m.

Nice story.

I tend to avoid dialouge as much as possible, as when i create it, it sounds cringy. but still, great story.

[4595005] PizzaWarrior5 (US1) (Banned) [None] :: Oct. 17, 2016, 1:12 a.m.

Sameehah (GB1) said:

This your first story?

Yes, Must be very sh!tty and cringy.

[4595326] Demonic Fusion (US1) [None] :: Oct. 17, 2016, 3:18 p.m.

Boi, Don't leave me out, Your story would have been worse without me! Lol

[4595363] Sameehah (GB1) [GB1] :: Oct. 17, 2016, 3:42 p.m.

Its not bad lol,great for a first time. I have read cringier(if that's even a word xD) stories lol. TBH need a bit of cringe in a story to make it interesting

[4595546] PizzaWarrior5 (US1) (Banned) [None] :: Oct. 17, 2016, 6:51 p.m.

Sameehah (GB1) said:

Its not bad lol,great for a first time. I have read cringier(if that's even a word xD) stories lol. TBH need a bit of cringe in a story to make it interesting

Thanks. As for cringe, This is kinda meant to be a mystery/Horror kinda thing and Cringe would make it More cringe-worthy.

Demonic Fusion (US1) said:

Boi, Don't leave me out, Your story would have been worse without me! Lol

STFU

Thats All if have to say Demonic, lol