Forum: empire-en

Board: [942] US Migration Content - Community

Topic: [297073] The Medieval Ulterior: Part One: The Chrononaut

[4306060] Luxtena (US1) [None] :: Feb. 21, 2016, 5:46 p.m.

[4306082] Luxtena (US1) [None] :: Feb. 21, 2016, 5:53 p.m.

Let me know what you thought of part one please, leave your ratings, your opinions, and what I can fix to make it better, I hope you all enjoyed it!

[4306102] Luxtena (US1) [None] :: Feb. 21, 2016, 6 p.m.

And be honest, if there is something wrong, tell me so I can fix it.

[4306181] Cormyria (US1) [None] :: Feb. 21, 2016, 6:39 p.m.

I actually liked the way you tied all of our stories together even though our stories aren't over yet .....

[4306617] Luxtena (US1) [None] :: Feb. 22, 2016, 4:31 a.m.

All of our stories our going to be connected, or at least that's what we and noble were planning.

[4306623] Noble Leone (ASIA1) [None] :: Feb. 22, 2016, 4:56 a.m.

It's what we are hoping for anyways, though it will take a long time to piece them together in the intricately spun web that we are planning to build. 

Anyways, I give it 8/10 stars, I think you could probably improve it with more descriptive writing, and I sometimes got confused about the structure of the book, as in, are they in chapters? If not, how are you organizing this thing? That might be just me though, since I am a neat freak, just look at my castle!

[4306635] Luxtena (US1) [None] :: Feb. 22, 2016, 5:50 a.m.

I am organizing them by sections, if I do a post that's too long, it begins to bore me and I can't do them to the best of my ability, so they are kind of like chapters, it may make more sense if I do them all in one post and edit it every time I want to add something new.

[4306646] Noble Leone (ASIA1) [None] :: Feb. 22, 2016, 6:17 a.m.

Well, you could right a paragraph a day, so it doesn't get boring, then post it once you have completed the chapter.

[4306656] Luxtena (US1) [None] :: Feb. 22, 2016, 6:39 a.m.

a paragraph is not enough

[4307951] Noble Leone (ASIA1) [None] :: Feb. 23, 2016, 5:51 a.m.

Technically, any of our stories that include or mention the great beasts are connected, the only difference that Lux has added, is the mentioning of Czar, the character from "The Knight's Adventure". 

With that in mind, that means that "Fenrir Rising", "The Thousand and One Traveling Knights", "The Knight's Adventure", "The Medeival Ulterior", and "Empire Legends" are all from the same universe, and can be pieced together into one giant story.

And Lux, when I said a paragraph a day, I meant the same amount that you are writing per-post now, the only difference is that instead of posting it, you would continue to build it up until the chapter was finished. Basically, the same thing as you do now, just with more editing time and more organisation, but it's your story, you do what you want, I'm just giving you improvement ideas.

[4307960] Luxtena (US1) [None] :: Feb. 23, 2016, 6:11 a.m.

The way I do it let's me do more cliffhangers.  

[4307961] Noble Leone (ASIA1) [None] :: Feb. 23, 2016, 6:16 a.m.

That's true, oh well, just keep up your usage of descriptive language and you'll do great!  

[4380740] Steponrayman (US1) [None] :: April 15, 2016, 6:11 p.m.

           I like the useage of sci-fi adventure & painting with words, keep up the good work.  

[4380797] Steponrayman (US1) [None] :: April 15, 2016, 7:16 p.m.

            I give it 5+ stars for story telling!!!! Makes things more interesting!!!!  +

[4380804] Luxtena (US1) [None] :: April 15, 2016, 7:25 p.m.

Thanks! if I could fix my keyboard I would edit!