King Dooooooom wrote: »

ha ha ha! well, my name is definitely not Kate Mc. Flower tooter Maaaayyyyybbbbeee i am a female, maybe I'm a male (i am one or the other, i am not both cause that would be creepy and wrong). I shall not reveal! haw haw haw. Anyways, I'm 16 and a sophomore in high school.

hamzter247 wrote: »

i hope he didnt die. great story. do u have the whole story written? or are currently still writing it? u can probly win a contest or something..
write more!!!!!!

flashstriker wrote: »

yesssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss glad u wirting more u should be a author

King Dooooooom wrote: »

Yep, it's time for part 4


Yep, it's time for part 4


The rain was pouring down in bucket loads now. So hard, i could barely see where i was going myself. It stung my skin, absolutely drenched my clothes, and my hair was all out of place. It didn't help much that the wind was like a giant dryer, but instead it was blowing the rain all over me, instead of drying me. What a rip off. I could just barely grasp the knife in my hand, let alone see it. And was i heading south? I seemed to have lost track with all this stupid rain in my face! I looked down at my watch (i'm so glad i spent the extra 50 bucks earlier this week to make it water proof), wow it's getting pretty late. 9:30 pm. Drats, my mom and dad are probably home by now. ah well this is more important. I'll just tell them i was hanging out in the park, or i could tell them that.......

Crick! What was that?! Someone stepped on a stick not too far from me. Ah, it must my my foe. Better go get a closer look. Careful to be quiet, i tiptoed the best i could on the slippery, slushy mud. Rounding the corner, and sliding behind another big purple pine tree, i peeked around it to look around. CRICK! The noise is a lot louder now. Crick! What is making that noise? Straining my eyes in the darkness, i could make out a blob looking shape. Wait, that's no blob.Yes it's so not a blob! It's a dark shadow straight in front of me about 30 to 40 paces! I bet its Ray, my target. Tip toeing even lighter on my toes, and really grasping my mom's knife, i slowley advanced towards the shadow.

Now that i am closer, i can make out the shape of a person, crouching behind that big oak tree. Heh, heh, heh, i have you now! The object stirred, i paused in my tracks. But it settled again and i continued advancing. I'm now right behind it. Raising my knife to the sky, i prepared to strike. "THIS IS FOR THAT COMMENT YOUxxxxxxxxx" I yelled at the top of my lungs (sorry i used that word, but hey, i was mad at the guy so he deserved to be called that!) "what?" The object started to say, sorry its too late for apologies now Ray! Striking down with the long, sharp, knife in my hand, i clearly struck a big blow to the back of the objects neck. The object fell down to the mud.

Ha ha ha ha! I did it! I got my revenge! Pulling out Tearoys flashlight(which i managed to pick pocket from him while he wasn't looking) i turned it on to admire my doing. Wait a second, that's not Ray! oh no. Holy sweet mother of GOD! I DIDN'T! OH MY GOOD LORD WHAT HAVE I DONE?! THAT'S NOT RAY! THAT IS SO NOT RAY! I dropped my mom's knife from my hand, in shock. Despair, horror, regret, guilt, and all the other feelings i could think of. "My God, i...........i.....................i.............. CARSON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHAT HAVE I DONE TO YOU!?!?!?"

Lying there on the ground, covered in crimson colored blood, lay Carson. I could clearly see the wound i gave him on the back of his neck from the knife. His eyes were closed. Lifeless. "Oh Carson, the one person that i didn't want revenge on. I...... i am a MURDERER!!" i exclaimed, trying to hold tears back from my eyes. But i couldn't. Crouching down near near his body, i started to bawl my eyes out. "WHY?!?!? WHY GOD! WHY DID I DO THIS?" The rain had cleared now, and the moon was showing again. But i didn't care. I kept on crying. it was that moment that i realized my fatal mistake. A miscalculation. Standing up i examined my location. This is the Dark Marshland, located in the Dark Forest, but directly.......................................... ........... EAST of the center. And who did i say went EAST earlier? Carson. Went East. I cannot believe this! Why didn't i foresee it earlier? The wet wet mud, the slippery and slushiness? The Oak trees?! I MISCALCULATED!!!

"Kate? Carson? Where are you? it's time to go home now, Ray and Jason already went off. Where are you guys?" TEAROY'S VOICE! and he's coming this way..... FAST! Ok Kate calm down. Your a murderer now, so why not get rid of the body? Yeah, no evidence, means no punishment. No punishment, means Kate Mc Flower tooter is safe! Itsn't that what murderers do anyways? So grabbing a hold of Caron's bloody hand, I struggled to drag him off into the Marsh. Now wheres a good place to put a dead person? Hmm, quicksand? No too dangerous besides, marshes don't have quicksand. I think. I got it! I'll put him behind that big gigantic Oak tree, and bury him with mud. I quickly sped up my pace to a quick job, and dragged Carson, what was left of him, behind the tree.

I then proceeded to give him a proper burial. By that i meant slopping a whole bunch of mud over him. But i left his head out, just in case he needed air. Don't ask me why i thought that at the time. But that's when i did the most embarrassing thing that I have never admitted till this day. I, well I, umm, I, aw for get it. I bent over and kissed little Carson on the cheek. "I didn't mean to take it out on you Carson. I'm so sorry. Rest in Peace little guy." With those little words said, i ran off to find Tearoy, leaving that bloody knife behind, still stuck in the mud when i let it go.

"There you are Kate! I've been looking for you forever. Ray and Jason already left an hour ago, and my parents are so going to ground me cause i'm so late. Where's Carson?" Tearoy asked me. That struck a pin into my heart. "Um, he left for home already. He told me so. Only i am left. So let's just go home ok? And who cares if you get grounded? I have bigger problems!" i blurted out that lie as fast as i could. "Bigger problems? Like what?" Tearoy asked again, this time he looked confused. "Um, NOTHING! I JUST GOT TO GO TEAROY! see you tomorrow buddy!" I grinned, dashing off as fast as my legs could carry me.

"Your weird Kate! Very, very weird." i heard Tearoy yell back to me. But i didn't care. I am a murderer now. And strangely, i felt sorry for Carson, but my feeling for revenge stayed with me. I still wanted it. No Kate stop it! That's enough! You just shut up you stupid revenge feeling! I don't want you any more! I arrived at home shortly after 10:00. My parents must have thought i was in bed for they weren't up. SO i threw off my clothes, and leaped into my nice soft bed. But i wasn't settled. The thought of Carson, bloody and lifeless, was still in my mind. The thought of him, buried in mud behind a tree disturbed my. And it did. For weeks, and weeks, and weeks on end. A month had passed, and i was still uneasy. Tearoy, Ray, and Jason kept pestering me about where Carson was. But i said he moved away, and of course they bought it. For now anyways. I am going to be forever haunted my whole entire life! Forever. At least until i get into a car accident and go into a comma. But right now, i'll still be haunted.


And to think, all of this started because of Rays stupid comment. And i let it bother me to the point of revenge. Revenge that totally backfired in the end. I ended up, killing my best friend Carson, who i said was a brat. But now i take it back. I wish he was here, right now, instead of in that big place in the sky. That stupid comment was, that i wished never would have bothered me was this "Make your speech Kate Mc Flower POOTER! If you don't gas us up with your farts first!". It just proves the point that Revenge, is NOT so sweet.Yep, it's time for part 4


The rain was pouring down in bucket loads now. So hard, i could barely see where i was going myself. It stung my skin, absolutely drenched my clothes, and my hair was all out of place. It didn't help much that the wind was like a giant dryer, but instead it was blowing the rain all over me, instead of drying me. What a rip off. I could just barely grasp the knife in my hand, let alone see it. And was i heading south? I seemed to have lost track with all this stupid rain in my face! I looked down at my watch (i'm so glad i spent the extra 50 bucks earlier this week to make it water proof), wow it's getting pretty late. 9:30 pm. Drats, my mom and dad are probably home by now. ah well this is more important. I'll just tell them i was hanging out in the park, or i could tell them that.......

Crick! What was that?! Someone stepped on a stick not too far from me. Ah, it must my my foe. Better go get a closer look. Careful to be quiet, i tiptoed the best i could on the slippery, slushy mud. Rounding the corner, and sliding behind another big purple pine tree, i peeked around it to look around. CRICK! The noise is a lot louder now. Crick! What is making that noise? Straining my eyes in the darkness, i could make out a blob looking shape. Wait, that's no blob.Yes it's so not a blob! It's a dark shadow straight in front of me about 30 to 40 paces! I bet its Ray, my target. Tip toeing even lighter on my toes, and really grasping my mom's knife, i slowley advanced towards the shadow.

Now that i am closer, i can make out the shape of a person, crouching behind that big oak tree. Heh, heh, heh, i have you now! The object stirred, i paused in my tracks. But it settled again and i continued advancing. I'm now right behind it. Raising my knife to the sky, i prepared to strike. "THIS IS FOR THAT COMMENT YOUxxxxxxxxx" I yelled at the top of my lungs (sorry i used that word, but hey, i was mad at the guy so he deserved to be called that!) "what?" The object started to say, sorry its too late for apologies now Ray! Striking down with the long, sharp, knife in my hand, i clearly struck a big blow to the back of the objects neck. The object fell down to the mud.

Ha ha ha ha! I did it! I got my revenge! Pulling out Tearoys flashlight(which i managed to pick pocket from him while he wasn't looking) i turned it on to admire my doing. Wait a second, that's not Ray! oh no. Holy sweet mother of GOD! I DIDN'T! OH MY GOOD LORD WHAT HAVE I DONE?! THAT'S NOT RAY! THAT IS SO NOT RAY! I dropped my mom's knife from my hand, in shock. Despair, horror, regret, guilt, and all the other feelings i could think of. "My God, i...........i.....................i.............. CARSON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHAT HAVE I DONE TO YOU!?!?!?"

Lying there on the ground, covered in crimson colored blood, lay Carson. I could clearly see the wound i gave him on the back of his neck from the knife. His eyes were closed. Lifeless. "Oh Carson, the one person that i didn't want revenge on. I...... i am a MURDERER!!" i exclaimed, trying to hold tears back from my eyes. But i couldn't. Crouching down near near his body, i started to bawl my eyes out. "WHY?!?!? WHY GOD! WHY DID I DO THIS?" The rain had cleared now, and the moon was showing again. But i didn't care. I kept on crying. it was that moment that i realized my fatal mistake. A miscalculation. Standing up i examined my location. This is the Dark Marshland, located in the Dark Forest, but directly.......................................... ........... EAST of the center. And who did i say went EAST earlier? Carson. Went East. I cannot believe this! Why didn't i foresee it earlier? The wet wet mud, the slippery and slushiness? The Oak trees?! I MISCALCULATED!!!

"Kate? Carson? Where are you? it's time to go home now, Ray and Jason already went off. Where are you guys?" TEAROY'S VOICE! and he's coming this way..... FAST! Ok Kate calm down. Your a murderer now, so why not get rid of the body? Yeah, no evidence, means no punishment. No punishment, means Kate Mc Flower tooter is safe! Itsn't that what murderers do anyways? So grabbing a hold of Caron's bloody hand, I struggled to drag him off into the Marsh. Now wheres a good place to put a dead person? Hmm, quicksand? No too dangerous besides, marshes don't have quicksand. I think. I got it! I'll put him behind that big gigantic Oak tree, and bury him with mud. I quickly sped up my pace to a quick job, and dragged Carson, what was left of him, behind the tree.

I then proceeded to give him a proper burial. By that i meant slopping a whole bunch of mud over him. But i left his head out, just in case he needed air. Don't ask me why i thought that at the time. But that's when i did the most embarrassing thing that I have never admitted till this day. I, well I, umm, I, aw for get it. I bent over and kissed little Carson on the cheek. "I didn't mean to take it out on you Carson. I'm so sorry. Rest in Peace little guy." With those little words said, i ran off to find Tearoy, leaving that bloody knife behind, still stuck in the mud when i let it go.

"There you are Kate! I've been looking for you forever. Ray and Jason already left an hour ago, and my parents are so going to ground me cause i'm so late. Where's Carson?" Tearoy asked me. That struck a pin into my heart. "Um, he left for home already. He told me so. Only i am left. So let's just go home ok? And who cares if you get grounded? I have bigger problems!" i blurted out that lie as fast as i could. "Bigger problems? Like what?" Tearoy asked again, this time he looked confused. "Um, NOTHING! I JUST GOT TO GO TEAROY! see you tomorrow buddy!" I grinned, dashing off as fast as my legs could carry me.

"Your weird Kate! Very, very weird." i heard Tearoy yell back to me. But i didn't care. I am a murderer now. And strangely, i felt sorry for Carson, but my feeling for revenge stayed with me. I still wanted it. No Kate stop it! That's enough! You just shut up you stupid revenge feeling! I don't want you any more! I arrived at home shortly after 10:00. My parents must have thought i was in bed for they weren't up. SO i threw off my clothes, and leaped into my nice soft bed. But i wasn't settled. The thought of Carson, bloody and lifeless, was still in my mind. The thought of him, buried in mud behind a tree disturbed my. And it did. For weeks, and weeks, and weeks on end. A month had passed, and i was still uneasy. Tearoy, Ray, and Jason kept pestering me about where Carson was. But i said he moved away, and of course they bought it. For now anyways. I am going to be forever haunted my whole entire life! Forever. At least until i get into a car accident and go into a comma. But right now, i'll still be haunted.


And to think, all of this started because of Rays stupid comment. And i let it bother me to the point of revenge. Revenge that totally backfired in the end. I ended up, killing my best friend Carson, who i said was a brat. But now i take it back. I wish he was here, right now, instead of in that big place in the sky. That stupid comment was, that i wished never would have bothered me was this "Make your speech Kate Mc Flower POOTER! If you don't gas us up with your farts first!". It just proves the point that Revenge, is NOT so sweet.